Storm breaker diary entry (by Bella Outram)

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Posted by | Posted in Uncategorized | Posted on 02-03-2015

Yesterday morning my life turned upside down, I dolkn’t even know were to start. At 3 am I was awoken by a loud knock at the door. I peered through the curtains to see what was going on.  Many police cars were parked on the kerb. I didn’t know what was going on but all i did know was that it couldn’t be good….

 

 

 

Comments (4)

I’m gripped – is the next instalment coming soon Bella? A very exciting opening to your story.

GREAT WORK BELLA! I REALY ENJOYED IT BECAUSE IT LEFT A CLIFF HANGER WHICH MADE IT MORE TENCE, I ALSO ENJOYED IT BECAUSE YOU USED LOTS OF GOOD VOCABULARY WHICH MADE IT MORE INTRESTING. YOU COULD IMPROVE BY DESCRIBING WHAT THE POLICE MEN WHERE DOING.
WHY WERE THE POLICE MEN THERE, WERE THEY AFTER YOU OR SOMEONE ELSE?

Good work Bells, Hopefully this wont be the last diary entry I want to know what happens lol

-Nice way to make the suspence, I really liked it I liked the part where you said I dont even know where to start

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